thunder fire [pegasus]

==Basic Information==
Name: thunder fire
Age:18
Gender: male
Race: Pegasus pony
Occupation: pyrotechnics engineer

==Physical Description==
Picture:
Coat Color: Dark yellow
Mane and Tail Color: Dark orange and light yellow
Eye Color: burned orange
Cutie Mark: (ponies and zebras only) lightning striking a fire

==Personality==
Your character’s personality: Competitive but friendly. He will help any pony no matter what unless you give him a reason not to he likes any person who helps him but get on his bad side and he will go off like a bomb and you are on his boom list permanently

==History==
Your character's backstory:

thunder grew up around a very hyper house everyone was pyro crazy. His great great grandfather was the pyrotechnic worker for the famous Dj-Pon3(AKA vinyl scratch). At a young age he learned that he had a gift with explosives. He felt that he should pursue a career in explosives. He wandered the world looking for a job. That is until he found the ruins of old clouds dale and so a rainbow twinkling in one of the buildings. He decided to go investigate. Little did he know that he had stumbled onto the infamous Rainbow Factory. He looked in and so a whole manner of dark magic and science should never be touched by any pony and yet he was slightly interested. At a young age he was told the stories of the rainbow factor and the horrors that went on within. But he still did not believe it still existed or that it even existed at all. But after seeing the horrors he flew home haunted by the images he saw. When he arrived home his family asked why he was crying. He replied with but one word “rainbows”. At this his parents became worried. There had not been a rainbow in equestria in many moons. But no one could get anything else out of him but all he continued to say was rainbows. Randomly during a normal day he would breakdown in fits of insanity screaming “rainbows” after a few months of this his parents had him acquitted to the shatter hoof correctional facility in the mental ward. 5 years later he was released and that is where we begin our journey.

==SPECIAL==
Strength:3
Perception:7
Endurance:5
Charisma:7
Intelligence:7
Agility:7
Luck:5

==Secondary Attributes==
Health:145
DT:8
AP:34
RM:7
Crit Threshold:96
Botch Threshold:6
Dodge:18
==Skills==
Alchemy: (zebras only)
Barter:19
Energy Weapons:38[TAG!]
Explosives:38[TAG]
Guns:23
Lock pick:38[TAG]
Magic: (unicorns only)N/A
Medicine:23
Melee:15
Repair:23
Science:23
Sneak:23
Speech:23
Survival:19
Unarmed:19

==Racial Attributes==
List your race’s natural perks here.

PEGASUS PONY

Wings! Now you can mess with all those suckers on the ground.

•Natural DT: 2

•Natural unarmed damage: 2

•Can learn Equestrian martial arts.

•On a Wing and a Prayer: Capable of flight.

•Leaf on the Wind: +5 to dodge rolls while flying.

•Flyin’ Circles Round Ya: Can increase Agility to 12 via perks.

PEGASUS PONY
Wings! Now you can mess with all those suckers on the ground.

• Natural DT: 2
  
• Natural unarmed damage: 2
  
• Can learn Equestrian martial arts.
  
• On a Wing and a Prayer: Capable of flight.
  
• Leaf on the Wind: +5 to dodge rolls while flying.
  
• Flyin’ Circles Round Ya: Can increase Agility to 12 via perks.
  

==Traits==

Trigger Discipline: Your attacks with guns and energy weapons cost 1 more AP but gain a +5 bonus on attack rolls with guns or energy weapons.

Small Frame: You gain +1 Agility, but you have 30 points less health


==Perks==
List your perks obtained from level ups here.

==Inventory==
List your character’s belongings here: leather barding, 5 caps, A 9mm pistol (Damage: 16 – Crit: ×2 – AP cost: 5), A knife (Damage: 8+Strength – Crit: ×2 – AP cost: 4), Prism Blaster (Compressed Cell)DAM:12 AP Cost: 5 ST Req:1Ammo Cap.:30 Skill Req:0 Value:175 Crit Multiplier x 2.5Your basic magical energy weapon, fires magical beams that will take down most lightly armored enemies.

First off, welcome to the site! Come by the Chatbox and introduce yourself sometime.

You're going to need to make a number of changes before you can be approved. First off, characters are not allowed to have connections with ponies form the show, so you're going to have to redo the section about your grandfather working for . Secondly, there are no ruins of cloudsdale. It was vaporized; there isn't even a crater where it was. Plus, that area is fatally irradiated and overrun with ghouls. Thirdly, the Rainbow Factory does not exist FoE canon, so that is going to have to be taken out entirley. Next, Shattered Hoof is a slaver hive. If his parents took him there, they would all have been captured and enslaved. Basically, your entire history needs to be redone. It simply does not fit with the FoE universe and canon. Also, your signature should be a combat stats summary, as you can see here: http://www.falloutequestria.net/t524-new-character-guide#14586

In addition, you have no details on the rest of your life whatsoever. Did you live in a town? a Stable? Please expand on your life a bit. Your personality section is also too brief, and needs more development. If it helps, take a look at some of the approved characters. We generally ask for 1 to 2 paragraphs for personality and about 3 paragrapgs history. If it's well-written, though, we can make exceptions. This brings us directly to the next, and final, problem: I find your grammar to be a bit lacking. Please review your history and personality and run them through spellcheck. To avoid headaches and confusion, We require our members to be able to make legible posts. You don't need to have perfectly flawless grammar, but right now you don't meet the standard. Please take a bit more care writing posts in the future. I'd also like you to change the text colour to something more visible; your current colour scheme is making my eyes bleed...

Unfortunatley, due to the outstanding errors, your application is Denied. I'm here to help you get things sorted out, though, so if you have any questions or want any help you can send me a PM, contact me in the Chatbox, or simply comment here.